Peer Review (Shanae)

I think you have a wonderful story and you have written an incredible essay. Your story completely fits in and it flows smoothly, it does not seem awkward. I like that you provide a background about how your academic life was like in Jamaica, and how oral communication is not one of the first priorities in a Jamaican school, neither is literacy. I like that you elaborated on how you did not really form a connection with any of the reading material that was provided to you in Jamaica. I also like the fact that you mentioned that you pushed yourself to your limit and read all these books because of the need to fit in. It is also interesting to me how watching television shows and movies helped you with your speaking and your accent. That when you read The Hunger Games is the first time that you truly felt like you were reading for yourself and not just to teach yourself certain things to fit in. I think one thing I would recommend is to use more outside examples of other people and incorporate them into your essay. You could use more examples from Carillo, or the one that professor Saint John sent by Biswas. I think that would make your essay stronger because Biswas also had a similar journey of teaching herself English. Other than that and a few punctuation errors, I think you had a wonderful essay. 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1k98L-JQSxM6IUPgKEotu99e7q6MiBv_W-CkGqq_V-sM/edit